![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
Soooo, if you read my crazy OMG WHAT WAS I THINKING fic Dancing Through Life with Strangers then you might be pleased to know that I have the second chapter completed. All thirteen plus thousand words! W007!!!
Now you might not be pleased to know that it will be a little while fine tuning it. Which I have been doing for the past three weeks that it's been complete. I was having trouble finding Harry's voice. Originally, I had planned on having two chapters per POV, but that leaves a lot of things unanswered. Which is one of the reasons this took so long to complete. Draco's second chapter was almost finished and I had to break ground with Harry's. Harry is kind of a complex, yet not really, creature in this. And I am discovering him along with you guys. He's childishly mature, and he's cowardly brave. Basically he is a huge oxymoron of a mess. He's coming to life before me and I have to see if he works before I pass him on to you.
With Draco I had her/him in my head. I know Draco. I just know her/him in this. Harry I have five different ways for him to go and he is stubbornly refusing them all. It'd help if I worked with a beta, which I will once the whole thing is complete and needs further fine tuning. This is that ONE that I have to get out first, in all it's horrifying glory, and then have someone go back over it with me once the mania has worn down. :D
Now that the preliminary excuses are out of the way let's get down to fic chat, shall we?
First and foremost there is a big, insanely huge plot hole that I am leaving for a later date. It has to do with the maternal bond. Someone, won't name names, explains to Harry that a maternal bond is needed. Harry grows bored and the subject is dropped. The biggest part is that you don't know how, if all of this research is fairly new and fascinating, Draco would be aware of his need to change gender. *Wiggles brow* Yes I am that insane. HUGE Plot hole and I want it there, because it comes up at a later deal. The whole bond mess, and another nice little "Bondy" sort of mess that you discover, is explored through the entire ordeal. Even if you DON'T actively "see" it being explored. It becomes apart of them both...and I am rambling.
Second, The Weasleys are very different, what you see of them, in this next chapter. There is a reason, people are perceived differently by others. I love exploring the Draco/Weasley dynamic and the Harry/Weasley dynamic. As I said in the last chapter it is only Weasley bashing when it's Draco. He sees them as he always has, and Harry, Harry understands them as he's always done.
Third, there is more sex than I'd care for. Like lots of it Harry with others, Harry with Draco LOTS. And almost no Teddy but I think I give reason for that. Really this is mostly Harry and Draco and Obsession. Sex is really the only way they interact at the moment so it was kind of important...or at least that is my excuse.
Fourth, Still haven't got to why Teddy doesn't recognize his mum and dad. That has to be explored more when I get to Draco. Harry's kind of a piss poor godfather.
Fifth, Ginny is a creature I want to explore more in depth but I don't want to take away from what I am trying to build with Draco. I rather feel sorry for her in this, I know at the moment you are probably thinking that she's a complete cunt. Well prepare for a surprise. Not much of a surprise now I suppose. BWAHAHAH
Sixth, Ummmm, I imagine that the time will shift more quickly from now on so this drawn out kind of redundant pace that Harry has will hopefully not stick around. Also Harry's chapter might be two parts. As I read over it I keep seeing stuff that needs to be expanded on. Explained more. Draco is the more simple one as I've said. Cut and dry: Here's your kid, you nurture while I be a complete mess who hasn't sorted out his problems (This being Harry and all).
Alright that'll be it then, as I know I've probably bored you all to death. I know I'm ready to drown myself after that, who said this chic should write updates to crazy fics anyways ;)
Hopefully this next weekend the second part or parts will be up and you can give some feed back. Let me know what you think will happen and where it ought to go. Because at this point I am driving this bitch without a map.
Now you might not be pleased to know that it will be a little while fine tuning it. Which I have been doing for the past three weeks that it's been complete. I was having trouble finding Harry's voice. Originally, I had planned on having two chapters per POV, but that leaves a lot of things unanswered. Which is one of the reasons this took so long to complete. Draco's second chapter was almost finished and I had to break ground with Harry's. Harry is kind of a complex, yet not really, creature in this. And I am discovering him along with you guys. He's childishly mature, and he's cowardly brave. Basically he is a huge oxymoron of a mess. He's coming to life before me and I have to see if he works before I pass him on to you.
With Draco I had her/him in my head. I know Draco. I just know her/him in this. Harry I have five different ways for him to go and he is stubbornly refusing them all. It'd help if I worked with a beta, which I will once the whole thing is complete and needs further fine tuning. This is that ONE that I have to get out first, in all it's horrifying glory, and then have someone go back over it with me once the mania has worn down. :D
Now that the preliminary excuses are out of the way let's get down to fic chat, shall we?
First and foremost there is a big, insanely huge plot hole that I am leaving for a later date. It has to do with the maternal bond. Someone, won't name names, explains to Harry that a maternal bond is needed. Harry grows bored and the subject is dropped. The biggest part is that you don't know how, if all of this research is fairly new and fascinating, Draco would be aware of his need to change gender. *Wiggles brow* Yes I am that insane. HUGE Plot hole and I want it there, because it comes up at a later deal. The whole bond mess, and another nice little "Bondy" sort of mess that you discover, is explored through the entire ordeal. Even if you DON'T actively "see" it being explored. It becomes apart of them both...and I am rambling.
Second, The Weasleys are very different, what you see of them, in this next chapter. There is a reason, people are perceived differently by others. I love exploring the Draco/Weasley dynamic and the Harry/Weasley dynamic. As I said in the last chapter it is only Weasley bashing when it's Draco. He sees them as he always has, and Harry, Harry understands them as he's always done.
Third, there is more sex than I'd care for. Like lots of it Harry with others, Harry with Draco LOTS. And almost no Teddy but I think I give reason for that. Really this is mostly Harry and Draco and Obsession. Sex is really the only way they interact at the moment so it was kind of important...or at least that is my excuse.
Fourth, Still haven't got to why Teddy doesn't recognize his mum and dad. That has to be explored more when I get to Draco. Harry's kind of a piss poor godfather.
Fifth, Ginny is a creature I want to explore more in depth but I don't want to take away from what I am trying to build with Draco. I rather feel sorry for her in this, I know at the moment you are probably thinking that she's a complete cunt. Well prepare for a surprise. Not much of a surprise now I suppose. BWAHAHAH
Sixth, Ummmm, I imagine that the time will shift more quickly from now on so this drawn out kind of redundant pace that Harry has will hopefully not stick around. Also Harry's chapter might be two parts. As I read over it I keep seeing stuff that needs to be expanded on. Explained more. Draco is the more simple one as I've said. Cut and dry: Here's your kid, you nurture while I be a complete mess who hasn't sorted out his problems (This being Harry and all).
Alright that'll be it then, as I know I've probably bored you all to death. I know I'm ready to drown myself after that, who said this chic should write updates to crazy fics anyways ;)
Hopefully this next weekend the second part or parts will be up and you can give some feed back. Let me know what you think will happen and where it ought to go. Because at this point I am driving this bitch without a map.
![[identity profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/openid.png){kind=small}
no subject
Date: 2011-03-23 11:55 am (UTC)From:no subject
Date: 2011-03-23 12:01 pm (UTC)From:no subject
Date: 2011-03-24 04:25 am (UTC)From:no subject
Date: 2011-03-24 04:00 pm (UTC)From:no subject
Date: 2011-03-30 02:28 am (UTC)From:Initially, I gave it a try because I very much liked how you stated that Draco wasn't going to be the typical genderbent Mary-Sue. I honestly hate it that she's so ethereally attractive. I like thinking of the possibility that no matter how beautiful Draco is as a man, he'd be amiss as a woman.
However, when I clicked through the link, I found out that it was written in first person POV. See, I'm a very strange reader wherein I don't bother going through a story once I figure out it's first person POV--yes, I'm well-aware I've missed out on quite a few good ones for being too selective but it's just the way I roll.
Somehow, I thought about the fact that I loved the Percy Jackson series to bits so I went back and read your story anyway.
Draco is so beautiful in this but I wanted to stop a few times because everything seemed so depressing. I loved and likewise, hated the fact that Draco was so complacent and so resigned to the fact that the world is being quite a bitch. It's not the Draco I'm accustomed to but I'm quite sure, if being brought in the same position, it will be the same position he will be in.
Harry was just horrible and I virtually wanted to stab him.
When I came to the next chapter, I almost stopped reading once again since I really, really hate having to go through the same story written in two POVs. It reminded me too much of harlequin novels but I figured, I went this far, liked the first part, why not give this one a try?
So I did and it made me understand Harry a little but it didn't exactly make me like him. He continued to irritate me because, for someone who was previously very concerned with everything else, he turned the polar opposite and decided to be insensitive towards everything outwardly. What I dislike about him more is that, he isn't really insensitive inwardly, which makes him pretty much a coward for not being able to man up to whatever he is feeling.
But I'm glad for having gone through the second chapter as it highlighted parts we aren't able to see with Draco's POV--perspective-wise and plot-wise.
So I'm very intrigued and could not stop thinking about this entire thing since I've read it last night. I know it's strange to leave a review here but I read it offline yesterday.
Hope you update soon!
no subject
Date: 2011-03-30 02:31 am (UTC)From:I meant: It's not the Draco I'm accustomed to but I'm quite sure, if he had been brought in the same situation, he would most likely act the same way.
no subject
Date: 2011-03-30 02:46 am (UTC)From:I apologize for the two sides of the same story. My friend suggested that one. And at first I was hesitant, but I finally found a voice for Harry which I'd been lacking.
It reminded me too much of harlequin novels but I figured, I went this far, liked the first part, why not give this one a try? *weeps* I was worried about that. Mostly because of all the graphic sex and their obvious draw to one another, it happens rather fast in this...but as I like to think that their mutual obsessions from their teen years helped fuel that. Also the need to one up the other.
The next chapter won't be quite as sexual. If there is any sex. It was kind of my ground breaker, really. Anyway I'm rambling.
I really enjoy this review and I am quite glad that you left it here. This post was for the more drawn out thoughts! :D
I appreciate that you took the time to read my story, even through the parts you didn't enjoy! I always appreciate feedback both good and negative that way I can try to correct something. :D
Also, in all honesty, I really don't like first person POV. It's too one-sided and leaves out the development of other characters. And I've written in first person quite a few times but I don't prefer it. The original versions of this were not in first person. But Draco, (s)he's what sealed the deal on that. I like her/him more when I hear her/his voice. It made Draco more human(relateable?) to me. Whether that's true for you, the readers, and whoever I don't know.
no subject
Date: 2011-03-30 11:07 am (UTC)From:I apologize for the two sides of the same story. My friend suggested that one. And at first I was hesitant, but I finally found a voice for Harry which I'd been lacking.
It justified a few of his actions but not totally. I think this was definitely needed and definitely not redundant.
I was worried about that. Mostly because of all the graphic sex and their obvious draw to one another, it happens rather fast in this...but as I like to think that their mutual obsessions from their teen years helped fuel that. Also the need to one up the other.
The next chapter won't be quite as sexual. If there is any sex. It was kind of my ground breaker, really. Anyway I'm rambling.
I liked the sex very much. I swear.
I'm actually impressed that you took on to my comment very pleasantly. You're quite mistaken though, I actually did enjoy all parts. I just thought I wouldn't. It had all things I usually would veer away from yet I could not because your storytelling and your imagery were very beautiful, very raw, and very powerful. I could go on and on and on about how I had this story in my mind the whole day so it is safe to say that I was completely absorbed, entertained, and intrigued.
I actually did re-read it again a while ago and realized how the theme about obsession seemed to be central--something I didn't quite catch initially as I focused too much on the misfortune Draco's been placed in and Harry's incapability to be a worthy human being.
It's very subtle and I'm quite curious on how this would pan out. It is perfect the way it is though, don't get me wrong--you don't have to append or to add chapters or epilogues but that would sate my curiosity.
no subject
Date: 2011-03-30 07:55 pm (UTC)From:To be quite frank with you, I didn't think I'd enjoy it I read that last part as I didn't enjoy it. XD
I'm actually impressed that you took on to my comment very pleasantly. I get annoyed when people find their work so epic that they take personal offence at someone disliking it. I don't like every piece of literature of fanfiction that I read, like you I am quite picky, so I have to understand that not everyone will like what I put out there. I don't take it as a personal attack on my character.
I had another commenter who was surprised that I took the time to comment back because she truly had some major issues with my story. Like I've said, I don't take it personally. XD I guess that's rare.
Oh gosh I still cannot believe I misinterpreted that. NOW your comment makes a lot more sense to me LOL. I was like "Did they like it or not..." Again I will try not to read stuff and reply before I crash out.
ALSO: So glad you liked the sex! I was a bit hesitant. Sex can take away from a story, but I'm an overly sexual creature so it always seems to be prevailing in my stories. I always worry about that messing with how people interpret my story line. I don't want it to be PWP. That's nice and all but it's not what I intended for this...
Sorry for rambling at you again! Geez I am the worst about that!
no subject
Date: 2011-04-16 01:06 pm (UTC)From:no subject
Date: 2011-04-16 01:18 pm (UTC)From: